Here is a poem that I wrote most part of it loooooooooong time ago as a reply to a poem posted by a blogger who disappeared. I never posted it, but few days ago I was reading in my old documents and I found it and I thought it worth posting here. I added few lines here and there.
It is way different from the style I am used to write. So I would like to read yout opinions :D
A Conversation
Maybe you change your mood
With every change in the season
Maybe my mood changes
Without a reason
Maybe these walls divide us,
But these endless walls were
Built to protect us
And this silence came after
We have exhausted all the words
And we don't have much to discuss
But I can see you clearly
I see you between the lines in the poems you write
We do not have speak
Let our eyes converse in silence
Let them reach a solution
You should see it in my eyes
Read between my words
With your heart, you ought to feel my touch
Every sigh I take is yours
I inhale you in with every breath I take
You live within me
And forever you will be
Wednesday, October 18, 2006
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6 comments:
Hmmm…
My favourite line was, “Every sigh I take is yours”.
For some reason, I felt like this was the peak of bonding together. When you speak the words you’re partner is about to say, and when you feel their gestures before they actually act them out.
In one way or another, it’s being you, and the other person in the same time, which is fairly difficult, since you cannot afford to lose yourself in someone else. It wont make the relationship any stronger since you wont be able to recognise how you feel towards them anymore, you’re main concern will be feeling them and being them. It is essential to be aware of one’s own self at all times, but to be yourself, and someone else’s is a difficult task, yet it’s worth it, if your feelings are strong enough atleast! ..
Ermm.. okay I should keep my silence now =| ..
Thank you for sharing the poem though!
not very hopeless in poetry :) nice poems
&blog ofcourse
cheers
=}
answer to ur Q...
im around 180 :P without heels lol am i bet u im taller than u ;p
Memi:
Thanks for this comment and to be honest with you I am not sure of how to reply to it :D
But I think it will make the relationship stronger once each one of them tries and put himself or herself in the other's shoes for a while. It will help in recognizing one's faults.
Daydreamer:
Oh glad you loved it :D
And this blogger was a blogger who disappeared from the blogging scene long time ago :P
Islamic ChoCoHoLic:
Oh thanks and welcome in my blog :D
Spontana:
:)))))))))
Islamic ChoCoHoLic:
No I am taller but with your heels, maybe you will be taller :p
"I see between the lined in the poems you write ...and I inhale you in with every breath I take"
I felt you had something to do with those 2 lines and I hope I'm right, bottom line is the poem is good, it jumps off to different places but sticks to the same topic which is bonding and love being declared & from the ending of the poem I can tell that it is past love.
It is deep and short. :-)
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