Thursday, March 17, 2005

Alone With You

Well here is my latest poem. I have written romantic poems before but they were not anything like this.

It is called "Alone With You"


When I am alone with you,
You have to be careful from me
I can make you my hostage
Or I can set you free
So watch out from eyes
Cause they will entice you
And close your ears to my whispers
As you know what they can do
And be aware of my touch
As it will break all the fences
And stay away from my warm breath
It will surely shatter all your defenses
Don't get so close to me
Or you will feel my body's heat
And it will turn on your desire
And quicken every heartbeat
I will make you shiver
When I caress your cheeks with my fiery fingertips
And I will take your breath away
When I lock my lips on your lips
I will taste your sweet sweat
When I kiss you from head to toes
It will be just like the morning dew
That we see on every rose
The room lights are dim
But it is amazing how you shine
And when I hold you in my arms
I thank god that you are mine

25 comments:

Bloo said...

wayed wayed wayed wayed wayed wayed 7elwa
op expressive
o jaree2a
o really really reallly I LOVED IT


** formally known as vintage**

Aquamarine said...

this is definetly one of ur best. i loved it, really. like Jood said, expressive and jaree2. it's beautiful. :)

Najah said...

ooo nice poem mashallah and soo jaree2 like what aquamarine said..

I loved the last few lines the most:
The room lights are dim
But it is amazing how you shine
And when I hold you in my arms
I thank god that you are mine

Hopeless Poet said...

Thank you all!
Yeah it is a little bit jaree2 but it seems that you all like it .. so shall I write more jaree2 or stop at this? :P

haneen said...

Very very powerful…compared to your normal style.

You’ve let yourself go..the trick in poetry is to let yourself go…

Indeed it is JAREE2… :)

Hopeless Poet said...

haneen:
Thank you very much for the comment. And you are right, any poet should be daring somehow. You know what? I had to show this poem to like 4 or 5 people before posting it to see their reaction to this new style for me and I got positive replies from them :)

Aquamarine said...

ya i think u should definetly write more.

iamnasra said...

You had so much romance in you ..locked inside your soul..so it was its time to be let out....love is wonderful emotion..a gfit of God...not matter in what form it comes...(mother's love, friend love, a man to his woman)

Never be afriad to explore your poetic Horizons

Flamingoliya said...

now where is hopeless poet and what have you done to him?!
:p

a quantum leap!

Hopeless Poet said...

nasra:
You are right I have to unleash my romance beast and write more about my dreams and fantasies!

Flamingoliya:
So you are saying that the personality I revealed in my previous posts does not show the wild romantice side of me? :P

Preternatural_aL said...

It is BEAUTIFUL....
Some poems one can relate to , some poems u dont even understand ( well i dont) this poem is like WOAW

Flamingoliya said...

romantic yeah
wild not!
:p

Kazablanka said...

WHOA!

I LOVE THIS ONE!

mashallah, really good stuff.. this is my favorite.. hey can i steal it? :p

Hopeless Poet said...

Preternatural_aL:
Welcome to my blog! Thanks for the nice comment and you are right about some poems and I am glad you liked this one ;)

Flamingoliya:
Well now you know that I am wildly romantic :P

kazablanka:
Thanks :D
What do you mean steal it? Explain :P

Peach said...

Nice!
I like the heat radiating from between the lines ;)

AnGeL said...

dear Hopeless Poet,

i realy like ur poems alot, specialy this one

and since u write great poems, i can say that u could tell wether a poem is good or not, therefor i'm asking u to read somethings i wrote and tell me if u like them or not.

if u are intrested visit my blog and see the articles in the Archives (January 2005)

my blog is :
saraangelofpeace.blogspot.com

hope i didn't bother u ;)~

ma3a il salama
angel

Hopeless Poet said...

Peach:
Glad that you felt it ;)

Angel:
Dear Angel,
Welcome in my blog :)
Your comment about my poems made me blush :$ they are not that great!

I read the January archive and I commented :)
And no bothering at all :)
It seems you like Zidane!! I don't like real madrid by the way :P

ma3a el salamah

Najah said...

hmmm ur undecided picture is interesting and i bet that you are torn between updating and not updating...

Hopeless Poet said...

najah:
No no! I am not torn .. I always decide to update on Mondays :P

AnGeL said...

thanx ;)


I LOOOOOOOOVE real madrid and specialy zizou he is amazing

thanx for commenting on my posts

Hopeless Poet said...

Angel:
You are welcome :)

We may disagree on who to support in football but it seems we agree on the favorite writer! I too love Agatha Christie and I like mystery books :D

Hope said...

very nice..I had to close my eyes in some parts LOL..but its good:)

Hopeless Poet said...

Hope:
lol!!
Which parts you closed your eyes on? Can you write them so that next time I avoid such thing? :P

Princess Coffee Lover said...

I think nothing is anything like this.

This is SENSATINAL!

I liked it so much... write some more like these... I like the style and how straight forward you are :-)

Fa6ma said...

Man that's HOT love!! lol!!
LOVED IT!
I shall be careful around you hehe..