Tuesday, February 19, 2008

The Perfect You

An old poem that I have just finished today!

The Perfect You

There was the river and there were you
And there was the moonlight shining
The stars dancing all around
Roses like a bed covering the ground
The moon, the stars, and the roses combining
The night was so perfect and you were too

You stood there and you were glowing
And the scent of you filled the air
My emotions were like the river flowing
How I envy that breeze that passes through your hair
I was mesmerized and it was showing
And you acted just like you did not care
So could you only be a dream or a fantasy?
And all of this is just unreal
And I was drowning in an endless sea
Mislead by the way I feel

35 comments:

chika said...

How come they're always half done then suddenly you finish them in one night :p..

You know I like the poems.. it's good that you still post ;)

Hopeless Poet said...

Well..I have a folder of my writings which mostly unfinished poems so I open it and look at the poems and open 1 and see if I can add something or finish it and if I couldn't I move to another 1 and try with it! Most of the times I just give up and don't finish anything but yesterday I was lucky and managed to finish this :P

And it is good that you still comment here ;)

falantan said...

How I envy that breeze that passes through your hair

ahhh yes. sure do :)

Hamitaf La B said...

well you should be proud of yourself that you actually get to finish a poem...
the moment i start one... i just start ryhming random words...
like high with pie... you have rythm... :)

Hopeless Poet said...

Falantan:
Sure sure ;)
Thanks

hamitaF:
I am proud :D

Khalas I will teach you the art of rhyme ;P

manutdfanatic said...

"I was mesmerized and it was showing
And you acted just like you did not care"

Ohhh..... *sigh*

iNouf said...

awwww :(

lucky her, even if she was just in a dream

nice (f)

SwaRwaR said...

And I was drowning in an endless sea
Mislead by the way I feel (Y)
Mash'alla ..
I LIKE UR POEM <333
so nice

GreyShorts said...

Write a poem about death or misery . Pleaaaaase .

SKITTLES said...

"How I envy that breeze that passes through your hair"

that was hust beautiful !!!

Glow! said...
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Glow! said...

You stood there and you were glowing
And the scent of you filled the air
My emotions were like the river flowing
How I envy that breeze that passes through your hair

My fav. part :)

Lone Ranger'ess said...

ur poem reminded me of an arabic song bak in the days wen i listened to arabic and not to english.. its a song by one of the very few arabic artists who sung meaningful words.. its called "frshat raml ilba7ar" by kathim isahir. do listen to it, the lyrics are incredible!!

"And I was drowning in an endless sea;
Misled by the way I feel" <--very deep and heartful;)

Gloomy said...

its perfect ^_^

ditto Glow!

Rimyoleta said...

beautiful :)

Saudi Pearl said...

Hey Hopeless Poet...I kinda wanna say thnx for ur comment..I actually feel wanted which is a feeling i havnt had in a very long time...so thnx again :$

Saudi Pearl said...

hey hopeless poet, me again...jst wanted to say i kinda added u on MSN ...it seems ur a great person to tlk to...so i hope u dont mind :$

Oranjina fadidra said...

*sigh* how sweet

Life of Arab Woman said...

waw. great job. i miss these feelings :(

david santos said...

Excellent!
Thank you.

Lalla Mona said...

pretty cool :)

Fa6ma said...

Changed my link =D

Anonymous said...

Wow mashallah walla that was really really good.

manutdfanatic said...

Update.

Fa6ma said...

Gimme ur unfinished poems I'll finish them for u =p

Mademoiselle said...

Very meaningful. Luvd it =)

├J o u j a┤™ said...

amazingly written
i loved it

NAda said...

am late .....
you r not posting any more .. y ??
I love the blog do much

Nita said...

You write very well.

AhmedUAE said...

Amazing, as simple as that !

Desert-Roses said...

Lovely
!!

not better then my poem
ur competeled last time..

btw surprise ha?

Enigma said...

Nice poem but I only have one critic...

The title says she's perfect... In the poem she acts as if she ignoring.. That makes her not perfect :p

God gives things and take things..

Keep them coming^^ Glad to see you still posting!

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